um.
I'm trying to make sense out of this song. Most of the song I get. Some parts, not really. As the guys blow me already mentioned, things get awkward as HELL. Transition from one section to another is also down the sink. I get the feeling that the notes are rather bouncing all over the places. It feels like the string part, which is like the rhythm section, tries to make sense and keep the structure of the song intact. But the melodic part just totally destroys it. I don't know seriously, if this should be harshly criticized or not, because some part makes sense while other parts doesn't even show a hint of sense.
The point, I'll be concise, is that both the melody and the rhythm section (string) is playing their own agenda. They are not in harmony, they are not even trying to support each other. If the connection and the support between rhytm and melody section DOES NOT FORM, everything burns.
PS: the melody that kicks in at 0:56, It's totally up to you. But I suggest you edit or take it off. Comes in too abruptly and it's kinda weird. Doesn't really fit in. Same with other places that have this melody.
Keep trying, the song was very interesting :)